writing

Hi, guys last week we where doing the writing but not any writing. we were making a simple sentence into good sentence. We choose a topic write about.  I got to choose animals. Here is mine. On the eastle rubric, I think my sentence is around a 5r or 6r.

The bird is sitting on the tree

The bird is sitting on the long and brown brunch. 

The big and beautiful bird is sitting on the long and brown brunch waiting for a meal.

The big and beautiful bird is sitting on the long and brown brunch waiting for a meal to full out of the sky like rain.

The big and beautiful bird is sitting on the long and brown brunch waiting hungrily for a meal like nuts to full out of the tree-like big drops of rain.

The big and attractive blue and gold macaw is sitting on the long and brown branch.  Waiting hungrily for a meal like nuts to fall out of the tree-like big drops of rain.